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Guy Biederman's avatar

Pinkie Promise

“If you die first, pinkie promise you’ll show me a sign.”

“Proof there's another place?”

“Proof you’re alright.”

“What if I'm a pigeon. How will you know I’m not just another bird?”

“Pinkie promise.”

“Like my other ironclad promises?”

“Like we’re kids, before we knew of broken promises.”

“If we don’t know, we won’t break them?”

“The difference between knowing and belief.”

“Like where I'm going.”

She smiles, curls her pinkie.

He's not even packed.

~

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Meg Pokrass's avatar

Oh man Guy Biederman. This is wonderful. Heartbreaking and lovely!

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Sherri Alms's avatar

Gorgeous. I especially love the pigeon line.

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Karen FitzGerald's avatar

Nice work! Resonates. Had that conversation w/ my little sis---of blessed memory.

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Karen FitzGerald's avatar

Me too, Puddle-dumped.

You had me at me too. You too, I asked. Yes, stuck like Burnt Matches no one seeks. Do we ever get it behind us, I wonder. I might rather be a mushroom cloud than a Burnt Match, or better, an Elm Oyster—hard to find. Oh, to not be me in the me too of it all. You too? Yes, me too.

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Sherri Alms's avatar

Love this. Puddle-dumped especially and the Oh, to not be me sentence. Are Burnt Matches mushrooms?

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Karen FitzGerald's avatar

They are, indeed, and thank you for your kind words, Sherri.

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Guy Biederman's avatar

Mushroom cloud, Burnt Match, love the poetry of this, the pace and flow ~

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Karen FitzGerald's avatar

Oh my -- I cherish this compliment from a master such as yourself.

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Karen Crawford's avatar

Blue

His eyes pool when he asks, Why are we here? You unpeel his chubby fingers curled around the steely chain links and cup his hand in yours, pointing it up towards the sky. Because, you say, shielding the river of flame in your eyes; here, there are no clouds. Have you ever seen this much blue?

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Meg Pokrass's avatar

This is beautiful, densely packed writing Karen! Love it.

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Karen Crawford's avatar

Thank you so much, Meg.

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Guy Cramer's avatar

Falcon

We’d never met, but his orange ‘66 Ford Falcon always sat in the driveway. He was trimming hedges when I looped the cul-de-sac. “Will you sell it?” I asked. He said over his dead body, though his daughter talked about some expensive treatments to bide more time against Agent Orange’s effects. Watching it shine on the tow-truck, I remembered losing a balloon as a child, unfolding my hands, shielding my eyes against the molten sun.

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Meg Pokrass's avatar

This is excellent! Agreeing with Sherri about the killer last line!

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Guy Cramer's avatar

Thank you so much Meg!

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Sherri Alms's avatar

That last sentence is a wowzer, Guy.

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Guy Cramer's avatar

Thank you so much Sherri!

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jeff harvey's avatar

“Keep your crap locked up. Can’t trust nobody.”

“Even the foster mom?”

“Old lady Kendall. She’s alright but she'll hit you sometimes.”

“I’m hungry.”

“Dinner always at six-thirty. Got some ‘shrooms. Fills you up.”

“Why is everything brown? Pillows, bedspread. The walls.”

“Cheapest shit is always brown.

“We ever get to go back home?”

“Home don’t exist for kids like us.”

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Meg Pokrass's avatar

Wow Jeff. This is sad, and wonderfully drawn!

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jeff harvey's avatar

Thank you 😊

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Louella Lester's avatar

I agree with you about not wanting to over analyze it. Great piece.

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BettyJoyce Nash's avatar

No wonder--it's a marvel, mysteriously transparent

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Sherri Alms's avatar

Great prompt, Meg. And that story is incredible. I failed completely with the word count but here goes.

"Will you go away?"

"You’re stuck with me forever like blue sticks to the sky." His eyes hide behind suddenly closed eyelids. "Mama did. Then grandma died. I was in her house by myself." His body crumples inward. "Honey, I am not going anywhere." I sit him on a kitchen stool, pierce his ear like my mother pierced mine, insert one of the tiny sapphire earrings my husband, dead now five years, gave me. "I wear this one always." I touch my left ear. "Now we are stuck to the same blue, like glue." His mouth doesn’t move, but I see a smile deep in his eyes.

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Meg Pokrass's avatar

Wonderful work Sherri! So sad, this story. Great use of dialogue in a tiny piece. Love the way these 2 connect.

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